A Year 5 Class' Learning Journey into Blogging
Dear Doga,I think this is a great personification poem but it is too easy, everyone could guess that its a cat. But nobody can think of a great personification poem (not saying its not great because it is) if you made one about a carpet what would it say?Daniel & Lucy
Hi, Daniel and Lucy It would say flap flap flap From Doga&Iris&Aryana
Dear Doga, Iris and Aryana,Why would it say Flap Flap Flap because in my vocabulary list it doesn't sayCflapAflapRflapPflapEflapTflapbut its should be:CollectableArcane coloursRocking the housePlated goldEnduranceTight
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Hi Doga Your poem is awesome. As Daniel said it is too easy.You can make it better by using more interesting words and write some more lines.If you could make a poem on bees what would it look like?Thanks for writing this post.James V.
Hi JamesV I would write... I am yellow and black I have a stinging back I have wings to fly I suck my honey from flowers. My name is :BuzzFrom doga&Iris&Aryana
Hi DogaI like your poem. Every thing you said in the poem is true I know becouse I havea cat. But I know cat do more then what you have written in your poen. For example: I can balance on any fence, I can jump higher then your fridge or this I use my tongue to drink water. But I'm not saying it's bad its good I'm just trying to give edvice for your poem.Adriel.R
I like this Poem alot as Daniel and James V said it is a bit easy.Instead of Nap you could of done sleep?Good Job!Daisy
I really like what you did there I really like cats i had about 9 in Bali Good job but you might have used I a little too much, do you have a cat and whats its name?Alex
Dear Doga, Nice poem.Sincerely, Ert